Well, it's a good start.
I liked that it had a good basic structure to it. It had a plot, and a comical ending. It was confusing in parts but you could use some more practice and effort--but it's not bad. Good job.
thanks! like i said im not the greatest but im trying thanks for watching glad u sorrta liked it
Confusing and Lacks Purpose
I think that this could stay, but I don't want to say that it should stay. It's confusing, and simply put, kind of pointless. I really don't know what to say, mainly because there's nothing much to criticize. :\
This is Useful
Personally, I think that people who go on NewGrounds are probably going to be expecting stuff in English. Maybe you should have someone help you translate it?
It is useful, however, but finding it might be a bit hard. Not to mention that there are tons of websites that are dedicated to this information. I do think this should be approved onto the site, however.
So Much Potential
Welp, here's what I think. This is a great piece but it's just not long enough, haha, I need more. The kick is great but I think that it could possibly use some more power--whether it's a second, more distorted kick layered with it, or something, I don't know. But, what I did notice is that you don't have a bassline. The lead synth is very generic and I actually like that. I think that it would sound nice if you had a little break between where the kicks come in and where the first time the melody plays, that would sound really nice. It would also add to the tension--because all hardstyle needs to sound epic to be true hardstyle. :P
The piano in the beginning is nice, but I think it could do with some changes. I'm not entirely sure as to what to tell you there, but it could sound a bit more... Refined. I don't know how to put it. But it does work--but since it's in the opening, you want it to sound nice and epic, you know what I mean?
You might want to use some hoovers and some scratches, but that's up to you. Scratches are more important than they used to be. I like the chorus in the background, and that pad is nice too. Really, you need to extend this. You really, really do. I love how much potential this has.
Generally, the great points:
-Nice fade in
-Chorus in the background sounds very fitting
-Kick is great, but I think it could be a bit more powerful. :)
-So much potential
EXTEND THIS >U
IT'S GOT TOO MUCH POTENTIAL.
I'm sorry, but with that distortion, it's just not as amazing as it really really could be. I would LOVE to hear the real thing without the distortion--by the way--this can be fixed with a limiter. (You might want to place it on the bass's mixer track)
This would be a really great mix if you just killed that distortion. It's great, it really is, but that distortion kills it, dead. :( Really, do it. You need to. :)
Glad to hear it. Now that I've gotten so many comments on that, I'll try to fix it. I was wondering if a limiter would do the trick and I'm glad you said so. I'll give it a shot and prob reupload it. Thanks a lot man! God bless.
<3 So True
Not only is this sick trance, but the backstory is so true. I recently lost my father and I know just how you feel. I wish I had more to say but I don't--there's not much I can tell you to improve on, and anything that there is, in my mind, is truly just opinion. This is great for what it was meant for, and that's just fucking dancing.
Thanks for this song, man. Sharing this with NG is probably the best thing you could do <3 :)
CURA is here to help you cope <3
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